Due to the fact that I was away on the IA trip, I was unable to
post this till this point in time. This week, we worked on improving our
essaies. In a pair with Syahirah, we worked together
to recognized how well our structure of our essay was, Syahirah said
that my essay's structure was ok and she couldn't find any major mistakes or
flaws which was good but I had to get confirmation from Miss Abena first. We
also did exercises on coherence and correlation went Miss Abena wasn't
here, this exercise did help me understand how points in my essay were supposed
to relate to each other, after checking my essay, I felt that the various
supporting sentences supported the related topic setencenes but I
could only be sure after checking with Miss Abena.
After completing a few exercises on how to write a good essay,
I approached Miss Abena to write my essay and after some discussion
with her, there were some major flaws in the essay. The major flaw that I
thought was most critical that my essay was almost like an encyclopedia, I
needed to interact with my reader more instead of spouting fact after fact. To
improve this, I need to introduce my personal perspective to show that I
have engagement with the essay.
Overall, my essay just requires some tweaking, but with some major
improvements, I'll feel much more confident with my essay.
